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Offline Kazenoken

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the poem of a begginer
« on: October 21, 2007, 05:15:19 AM »
like it says im just beginning to write poems so dont laugh at it and please give me some feedbacks thanks ;)

I've said that i wont bother her
but then why do i still look at her
i guess I'm not ready yet
I am not ready to forget

I just couldn't ignore my feelings
my feelings that is constantly changing
I told myself that I would give up but I cant
though in the end I still couldn't

I tried to forget, the things I have felt
because my heart hurts so much
but you can't lie to your self about how you feel
so all that I could do was to just watch

I would really like to do something
but I couldn't really do anything
I really am unworthy of such a thing
because in the end I could only do nothing




yeah its love

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Re: the poem of a begginer
« Reply #1 on: October 22, 2007, 04:32:28 PM »
Feel the same way, *sigh*, exact same way.
Chapter 2: Being With You

Toujou pursed then bit her lips as; she stared at the invitation with a gentle worried and passive look on her face. Could she go? Slowly, she sighed unhappily.

'Manaka-kun. . .' Sighing again with a huff, she got up and gazed at her room. Staring at her achievements, awards, and recognition she had received, she realized all of this was thanks to Manaka. He was her inspiration, her fire, and her bright light in the darkness. Like a guardian angel, he seemed to be there for her all the time, that was exactly the Manaka she had come to fall in love with.

So why was reading the invitation giving her the feeling of crawling in her bed, and just staying for three years?

Looking at the letter she read it carefully. Angrily for the first time out of jealously she tossed the letter before her eyes could even peer over it, as she felt tears drip out of her as she felt her eyes water and she let it all out.

"I love you Manaka-kun!"
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Re: the poem of a begginer
« Reply #2 on: October 23, 2007, 11:11:42 PM »
thats for my crush that i really really loved :'(

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Re: the poem of a begginer
« Reply #3 on: November 28, 2007, 09:27:45 AM »
we really experienced the exact same thing...  :'(
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Re: the poem of a begginer
« Reply #4 on: December 02, 2007, 09:17:44 AM »
it seems like you posted again what you have :P

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Re: the poem of a begginer
« Reply #5 on: April 14, 2008, 09:32:35 PM »
o0oo....That's really good. I like it. =D

Good job.

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Re: the poem of a begginer
« Reply #6 on: April 16, 2008, 01:50:43 AM »
thanks

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Re: the poem of a begginer
« Reply #7 on: June 02, 2008, 10:06:50 AM »
its really good. especially since you just started writing ^.^
you should definitely keep writing.

did you give her the poem?
or did you just write it about her?

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Re: the poem of a begginer
« Reply #8 on: June 03, 2008, 08:11:33 PM »
thanks a lot
and she read it i saw her read it but i didnt give it to her she just borrowed that notebook which i had the poem because my notes are there

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Re: the poem of a begginer
« Reply #9 on: June 04, 2008, 08:09:39 AM »
awwwwwwwwww. did she love it??

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Re: the poem of a begginer
« Reply #10 on: June 04, 2008, 06:48:12 PM »
i dont know but she said its pretty good since shes the one who taught me how to write a poem ~_~

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Re: the poem of a begginer
« Reply #11 on: June 06, 2008, 09:56:19 AM »
awwwwwww. thats cute ^.^

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Re: the poem of a begginer
« Reply #12 on: June 15, 2008, 06:35:11 PM »
then in the end i was rejected T__T

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Re: the poem of a begginer
« Reply #13 on: July 25, 2013, 12:17:25 PM »
Beginner indeed. It's beautiful.

Yay I'm late to the party.  :-[