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Reputation Gone
« on: February 07, 2006, 11:35:44 PM »
Noise-
dead sound choking through immense mass.
Wasted energy and disillusionment.
Headaches, nightmares, and endless rings amass.

Reputation tying lips shut.
Oh, does it hurt to regret?


Stares-
cold move moment holding thickening paranoia.
Open waves of delusions insult.
Whispers do not cause a sudden metanoia.

Reputation tying lips shut.
Oh, does it hurt to regret?


White-
an untraceable itinerary leading to unforgettable grasps.
Hesitant, but inquisitiveness overcomes.
Unforgivable sound filling your ears in irritation-rasp.

Reputation tying lips shut.
Oh, does it hurt to regret?

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Re: Reputation Gone
« Reply #1 on: February 09, 2006, 05:13:17 PM »
There's something in this. A thought that expresses how many feel. In any case I liked it.

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Re: Reputation Gone
« Reply #2 on: February 11, 2006, 07:16:11 AM »
I really like how it is set up.  The repetition is great.

*applauds*


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Re: Reputation Gone
« Reply #3 on: February 12, 2006, 02:08:52 PM »
Thank you both.
Knowing my poetry, most of what I write is repetition. In fact, when have I not used repetition? XP

But no, this is actually a random poem I wrote to help me boost my creativity. My first poem in two and half months.

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Re: Reputation Gone
« Reply #4 on: February 12, 2006, 02:39:20 PM »
I'm guessing you've got writer's block, then?  [Fill in any word] block sucks...

*glares at empty sketchbook*


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