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Can't really think of a title
« on: September 24, 2004, 04:02:37 PM »
As the sun set with a painted sky, a small crowd of curious comers grew near the shimmering red flames. Out in the distance lied a man of dark essence that could be felt a mile away. His face was soft though, and underneath one eye was a tear flowing heavenly down his face. A woman of nearby noticed him in the alleyways and walked over to investigate. “Pardon me sir but are you of alright?” The woman called over to the man. The man stayed frozen sitting in the darkest corner drowning in his thoughts. “Sir, please answer me.” The woman grew worried as he continued to ignore her. At last he finally spoke but of nonsense. “My Eden I was dear for has now forever gone. Only because of my pitted acts!”  The woman did not understand of what he was speaking.  She looked over to his shoulder and found that it was full of blood. At first the woman felt a bit frightened but asked if any assistance was needed knowing that her actions would be regretted. “Kind sir, please let me be of your assistance. You are in need of medical help from what I can see.” The man looked over to the woman and denied. “Leave for you will be in danger soon.” The woman found his rude actions disturbing and angrily responded. “Do n....” The woman felt pains toward her stomach and when she looked down a blade was inserted there. The man looked to see who had done it but no one was near her but the man himself. The woman fell to her knees and soon completely fell to the ground. Her last breath was extinguished from her body as she stared into the nothingness of eternity.

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Re: Can't really think of a title
« Reply #1 on: September 24, 2004, 05:31:04 PM »
*speachless* that was so amazing. hehe ...You get a double A+! lol ...may I ask what inspired  you? ^_^

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Re: Can't really think of a title
« Reply #2 on: September 24, 2004, 05:36:18 PM »
Arigato ^.^
Nothing really inspired me I just felt like writing a story and I wrote this. I have more but I am not finished.
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Re: Can't really think of a title
« Reply #3 on: September 24, 2004, 05:40:17 PM »
oh ....even though your not done its still good ......heh nothing inspired me either lol I was bored and started writing what came out of my heart and mind heh.....


so whats the whole poem about anyway? lol

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Re: Can't really think of a title
« Reply #4 on: September 24, 2004, 05:48:27 PM »
It is not a poem it's a story and I am still quite uncertain of whta it is about.

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Re: Can't really think of a title
« Reply #5 on: September 24, 2004, 06:14:17 PM »
It is not a poem it's a story and I am still quite uncertain of whta it is about.

hehe mis interpeted lol

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Re: Can't really think of a title
« Reply #6 on: October 02, 2004, 10:33:34 AM »
Here is of more


Weeks before a woman of extraordinary beauty stood by a lamp post as if she was awaiting for someone to come and pick her up. She looked up to see the beauty  of stars while feeling the warmth of the fire in the lamp post.  Suddenly a stranger comes by in his coach.  “Mi lady, of what are you doing standing here on such a cold night?” The woman then spoke. “What is a fancy man as yourself doing out here? “  The man chuckled a bit and replied. “I am awaiting mi lord to finish at the theater near by.” The woman became fascinated and started a conversation with the coachman. “Oh my, and who might your lord be?” The man then replied with pride. “He is in fact he is Wilfred Alexander Greenwood II.” The woman's eyes grew and she placed an exiting smile on her face. “You must be lucky to serve for such a wealthy man of his kind.” The man blushed a bit and found that time had gone by so quickly. He left off in the distance leaving the woman in the cold night. The next day she sat in the convert of her own home. She sat in her tiny one room apartment. The woman had decided to go out for a walk in the park she lived near. As she had seen Wilfred sitting in a wooden bench talking to some other fancy person. The woman smiles and decides to go and greet herself. As she walks over she is being stared at by that other fancy person. “Mr. Greenwood, pleasure to meet of your acquaintance” She bows and smiles sweetly. Wilfred only gives a cold look back but then responds. “Who might be to come and interrupt? Now shoo before I call the cops!” The woman was a bit shocked by his rude actions. “After speaking to your coachman I would of thought that you were one of the polite but I was wrong!” The man catches her attention quickly and replies. “Of what are you talking about? I have of no coachman and the last one I had was of crazy and was token over to the insane asylum.” The woman was a bit for she might have actually been talking to an insane one or even a ghost for that fact.  She was though fascinated and asked for a dinner with Wilfred. He agreed for he too had been interested in what she had said.
   The next day Greenwood awaited by a corner and when they met they took a small walk. Unaware that the woman was being watched by  the man that Greenwood was talking to yesterday she started to ask questions of him. Greenwood  said of nothing and finally he had took her to his house to eat the dinner they had planed. They ate and discussed of more topics. The woman, in fact quite enjoyed the conversation between them too but  Greenwood was not very interested. He was staring at the clock as the woman spoke and when looked out of  his window he had the man he spoke with the other day spying on them. The man soon disappeared and the woman soon left their date. He escorted her out walked her home. When he came back he found that the man was awaiting in the living room. Greenwood growled at the man. “Get out of my property” The man laughs. I have every right to be here. Unless you can pay your toll. Greenwood looks away. “I told you take as much money as you wish.” The man laughs silently this time “You know money is not of my matter. How about I make you a deal?” Greenwood knows that he would regret this action but agrees. The man explains every detail. He wanted the woman for his deal. Greenwood was relived for he did care of that woman. “Fine then the deal is settled.” The man shook Greenwoods hand. “She should be mine by the end of the month or you will be of my next experiment.”