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♥•My poems•♥
« on: April 03, 2006, 06:38:01 PM »
♥Almost♥
Almost over you,
I got rid of you,
your out of my heart,
your out of my life.

You run back when,
my gaurd is totally own,
sayin you love me,
sayin your sorry.

I open my arms,
I open my heart,
I let you back in,
you tear me apart.

You skim threw my thoughts,
you skin threw my heart,
you have me weakness now,
you tear me down.

Tear me down,
break my heart,
My denfense is up,
its all over now.



•So lost•
So lost in hate,
so lost in love.
I don't understand,
how you make me feel.
Again and again,
I hate you then,
I love you now.
What do i do when,
your lost imbetween.

So confused,
so full of anger.
 Why do you make me love you,
why can't i just hate you.
I look at you,
I hate you but then I love you.
I love to hate you..
\I hate to love you..
Why can't I just be left alone,
be away from you,
be happy again..

♥No title♥
Do you like me?
or do you not?
Are you playing with my head?
or just playin with my heart.

I need an answer,
I need it now.
Tell me you love me,
or don't tell me at all.

Stop playing games,
stop breaking my heart.
My lonley heart bleeds,
as you tear it apart.

You lie, you cheat,
you sneak, you peek.
You run back to me when,
I'm almost over you.

I can't do this anymore.
I'm dont, pull the trigger,
I'm gone.

•So sick•
So tired of you,
so sick of me.
So tired of games,
so sick of love.

You run back,
you take control,
you take me down,
its over now.

Living life,
as though you were never here,
living happy,
living free.

You come to me and say,
i love you and i made the mistake of my life,
you break my heart,
and watch me fall apart.

I know these suck..but hell.. i was bored and upset.

It`s weird how you say that you hate the boy who broke your heart but when he runs back to you, you're arms are wide open

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Re: ♥•My poems•♥
« Reply #1 on: April 03, 2006, 09:13:23 PM »
If you, the author of these poems think it sucks..
why did you bother posting them?
I sure hope you weren't expecting words of praise... (especially if you yourself acknowledge that these poems suck).
« Last Edit: April 05, 2006, 01:48:45 PM by Cgoten »

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Re: ♥•My poems•♥
« Reply #2 on: April 03, 2006, 09:19:38 PM »
This could easily be a copy and paste job of a thread by Angel or someone, and we'd all be none the wiser.





Edit: Upon further thought, I'm pretty sure this IS angel. Shame it took me a moment to put 2 and 2 together.
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« Reply #3 on: April 04, 2006, 05:31:06 AM »
um, question. Who the fuck is Angel?

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« Reply #4 on: April 04, 2006, 02:00:44 PM »
Ask Chuck Norris.
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« Reply #5 on: April 04, 2006, 02:56:46 PM »
um, question. Who the fuck is Angel?

You don't need to play any dumber than you already are.

Anyway, I figure we'll let you stay because I think by now everyone realizes how funny it is that you keep trying to come back just to post the same awful poetry time and time again. With any luck, you'll finally leave of your own accord once you realize everyone here hates you and only wants you around to mock your god awful poetry and non-sensical ramblings.

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« Reply #6 on: April 04, 2006, 03:50:12 PM »
I don't know what's going on.. but you guys sound mean...

Okay, I personally don't think the 2nd and 3rd one is that great... there are some very unnecessary words that keep it from flowing, I don't know how to explains.. sorry.. my poetry termonology has been long gone since i stopped touching poetry in gr. 8...... some of the connotation is a little harsh too...

but I like the first poem:  yeah, i feel your anger in it... there's a really good pace and rhythm to it...  uh.. some minor things that bug me there:
the "your" at the first stanza throw me off... should be "you're"...
the comma after "when" first line 2nd stanza also chop up the rhythm too.. other than that... "totally" on 2nd line 2nd stanza ruins the pace too...
"your" sorry should be "you're" last line, right?...


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Re: ♥•My poems•♥
« Reply #7 on: April 04, 2006, 04:19:49 PM »
Yeah, thanks. Anyways, Yeah last night I learned the correct way to spell it. So, Thanks anyways.

Edit: By the way, Cgoten, first off.. I have no idea what the fuck your talking about, and secondly, why make me feel twice as bad, as I do now? Don't you care about anyone else but yourself? :-\
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« Reply #8 on: April 04, 2006, 07:48:51 PM »
Edit: By the way, Cgoten, first off.. I have no idea what the fuck your talking about

Sure you do. If your over-emotional reaction wasn't a dead give away, try not to link to your forum in that other thread you made. That made it pretty blatant.

secondly, why make me feel twice as bad, as I do now?

Because you're dumb enough to keep coming back to a place where you know very well that no one likes you.

Don't you care about anyone else but yourself? :-\

Don't you care about the fact that everyone here thinks you are, for all intents and purposes, mentally retarded? I think you'll find the answers are similar.

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« Reply #9 on: April 05, 2006, 09:36:19 AM »
Ok. What ever. If you would actually even use any part of your brain, you would understand, That when I came here before..i was 12/13!! Now, i'm 14, almost 15. Get a clue. I've grown older. Learn to forgive and forget! If you can't already tell, i've actually learned to spell. *gasp*
anyways yeah. bye

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« Reply #10 on: April 05, 2006, 01:47:50 PM »
Seems you haven't learned not to lie, or to at least lie well. And if your poems are any indication, you haven't matured too much.

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« Reply #11 on: April 05, 2006, 01:57:14 PM »
Ok. What ever. If you would actually even use any part of your brain, you would understand, That when I came here before..i was 12/13!! Now, i'm 14, almost 15. Get a clue. I've grown older. Learn to forgive and forget! If you can't already tell, i've actually learned to spell. *gasp*
anyways yeah. bye

in your case, 11 was the high point in your life, it just goes downhill from there.

cheer up though, just think about it this way: 15 is one step closer to becoming a street corner whore!

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« Reply #12 on: April 05, 2006, 03:28:23 PM »
angel, come back when you're 18, with pics.. ;o

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« Reply #13 on: April 05, 2006, 05:37:35 PM »
lmfao. Pictures? I can give you fuckin pictures right now. My poem's...yeah. I've stopped for about...almost a year. Yeah, starting again, its gonna be kinda bad. So stfu. I don't lie well, ok? I don't like to lie, but yall wouldn't let me come back at all.

Anyways:: Get back on topic.
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« Reply #14 on: April 05, 2006, 06:22:58 PM »
Angel, I honestly don't know why you keep coming back to a place where no one likes or respects you.

It's just more entertainment for us; bashing your god-awful poetry and your naivety at subjects you claim that you know.

Oh, and on another note... only immature beings claim that they mature because they age. Some people live their whole lives being immature, so what gives you the right to even ponder that you have "matured" within an year's worth of time?

Face it.

Your poetry sucks, your notions upon maturing is simply stupid, and ludicrous, and I marvel at the fact that someone as brainless as you is allowed access on the internet.
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