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Offline Night Priestess

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A bunch of untitleds
« on: March 24, 2005, 06:10:40 AM »
Everything hurts so much,
Yet I can't feel a thing.

Everything's moving so fast,
But I'm standing still.

Everyone's got someone else,
But all I've got's me.

And I laugh, 'cause I know
Everyone else is more alone that I.


A call to war,
An end to deciet.
Can you hear the sound
Of marching feet?

Too long we've held
With all your lies.
It's time for us
To set things right.

You want the war?
We'll bring it to you.
Yet this war will be
Something quite new.

Upon the ground
The blood will spill
When you see us rise
Up over the hill.

Never again
To see the night,
You shall run,
Or stay and fight.

But we'll prevail,
This I know;
Though it will be a shame
To see all go.

To see the masses
Suffer as one;
But in war,
That's how it's done.

Too bad, so sad.
Your time is nigh.
So take up your arms
And prepare to die.


Words fly
Like razors round the room.
Teardrops fall,
Staining everything bright red.

She drinks more water,
But it tastes like blood.
She can't keep the sounds
From echoing 'cross her mind.


As the tears fall down,
I cannot see
Anything but red.

How can this have happened?!
How could I have become so tangled,
So strangled by this?!

The tears fall and stain red,
I taste it in my mouth,
So tangy and coppery-sweet.

My hand shakes as I write,
And yet I feel nothing.
I am completely numb.

And still my breathing and heart rate quicken
As the music puonds in my mind;
And again I am entangled in the web.


As the heat races through my body,
The room starts to spin.
I begin to float,
And I see colors engulf me.

I feel it pulsing through me,
Sense it in my veins.
Every nerve is on fire.
My mind has lost control.

Invaded by this entity,
By body tries to respond.
I cannot move,
For I have no energy in reserve.
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Well, I don't want the world to see me,
'Cause I don't think that they'd understand.
When everything's made to be broken,
I just want you to know who I am...

Offline Waffo

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Re: A bunch of untitleds
« Reply #1 on: March 24, 2005, 07:16:20 AM »
Wow, that's a lot.  I'm guessing you saw my comment in the contest thread on how not much is happening in Fan Writing and wrote a bunch of poems...

It's a bit hard to tell the difference between different poems so maybe you should add a line between them or something.  All of these poems were great!  Lots of imagery and even a few rhymes.


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Re: A bunch of untitleds
« Reply #2 on: March 31, 2005, 02:37:39 PM »
I'll make this Post of the Week.  Since there's four poems, there's bound to be one that random readers should like.

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