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5 more poems!
« on: November 29, 2004, 07:58:37 PM »
Feelings                                        Secrets
                                               
Are these fellings,                          I have a secert,
inside real?,                                   I can not tell,
do i really love u?                           u try to figure it out,
I don't know yet.                            You will never know.
 
It can't be,                                     You will never find out,                     
I on;y like you as a friend,             not unless someone tells u,
but on the other hand,                  I hate it when u ask me,
I like to be around you.                 The secrets so hard to keep.

No no!!,                                          I told i I wouldn't,
I won't let it happen,                      But i only told 2,
i can't love u,                                  does that make a difference,
i love someone else... i think.         because they also have a secret to.

But why is it,                                  Please don't tell my secret,
I hug u anytime,                             Please stop asking
call u when ever,                            I can never tell anyone else,
get jelus when u hang                   but thoughs two.
around someone else?

I guess,
I am felling these feelings,
I really do like u,
i guess i can't help it.


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Mean!!

Why do u do this to me?
It hurts me so much,
They way u look at me,
so mean,
so dead.

Its not fair that ur stronger than me,
I didn't do anything to u,
so why do it to me?
Its just not right.

Men and women have rights,
not to get picked on,
hurt by other people,
or get teased because of there color.

U pick on me because i'm a " White Girl",
well, this girl has had ENOUGH!!,
u need to stop,
u need to be nice.

I'm getting sick and tied of it,
its not fair,
u will get hurt,
and i'm glad to!!! Hmp
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I still love you

I love u,
so much,
u broke my heart into a million pieces,
it hasn't heal'd yet.

I still cry over u,
I still think about u,
I still dream about u,
and I still talk about u.

Are these signs of love,
or is it,
I'm still in shock,
that u would acually do this.

I don't know,
but i do know,
That u have made me,
Into this person.
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Tears

Whats happing?
There  are tears,
falling down ur facem
Whats wrong?

U seem,
sad or angry,
could it be,
tears of happiness.

You say that,
Its nothing,
but i know,
there's something.

I don't know,
but i will help,
help till these tears are gone,
far far away.
Deticated to: My best friend Tori
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How do u  like them? Am i getting better? And please.. don't coment on my spelling.
Fuck this fucking world. I don't belong here. I belong.. with someone like me. Someone nice who actually has feelings. who tries not to hurt other people. That would be nice. actually once -n- awhile... i wonder if there is a part on the world that is like that. I don't think so, cause the way people treat me. I mean, i don't try to hurt people, but, y'all do. People never understand me. Never have. Never will. So  just run away.

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Re: 5 more poems!
« Reply #1 on: November 30, 2004, 06:26:21 PM »
I can't explain what your poems are missing. Usually poems takes a creative mind. It just doesn't look professional when you don't take time writing it and really cherishing it. And aside from your spelling, your form of writing is a bit sloppy.

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Re: 5 more poems!
« Reply #2 on: December 01, 2004, 10:32:39 AM »
I like them yeah there good but odd lol but still good.. :D

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Re: 5 more poems!
« Reply #3 on: December 01, 2004, 03:55:39 PM »
>.< ODD!! ;D
Fuck this fucking world. I don't belong here. I belong.. with someone like me. Someone nice who actually has feelings. who tries not to hurt other people. That would be nice. actually once -n- awhile... i wonder if there is a part on the world that is like that. I don't think so, cause the way people treat me. I mean, i don't try to hurt people, but, y'all do. People never understand me. Never have. Never will. So  just run away.

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Re: 5 more poems!
« Reply #4 on: December 01, 2004, 04:06:57 PM »
You type them like you're on AIM...  It's horrid spelling...


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Re: 5 more poems!
« Reply #5 on: December 01, 2004, 04:13:25 PM »
aww.. stop giving her such a hard time. It seems like thats a really tough style to use. :-\

i like "Mean!!" and "I still love you". good. =)
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Re: 5 more poems!
« Reply #6 on: December 01, 2004, 07:43:41 PM »
hehe.. thanks. ^-^ thoses to " mean!!" i wrote that cause... some guy slaped me. and " I still love u" i wrote that 4 my ex. -.-

I know i have bad spelling. I don't really care eaither. >.< I just stink at spelling. so.. i told u not to post about that!!
Fuck this fucking world. I don't belong here. I belong.. with someone like me. Someone nice who actually has feelings. who tries not to hurt other people. That would be nice. actually once -n- awhile... i wonder if there is a part on the world that is like that. I don't think so, cause the way people treat me. I mean, i don't try to hurt people, but, y'all do. People never understand me. Never have. Never will. So  just run away.

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Re: 5 more poems!
« Reply #7 on: December 01, 2004, 08:25:50 PM »
omg some guy slapped you? thats horrible, i would take action if i see something like that  ;D

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Re: 5 more poems!
« Reply #8 on: December 02, 2004, 01:17:30 PM »
Your poem "mean" is my favorite, even though the form and spelling is very, very frightening.

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Re: 5 more poems!
« Reply #9 on: December 02, 2004, 04:20:08 PM »
yea.. i don't know why its everyones fav. Well.. i know my spelling is bad.
Fuck this fucking world. I don't belong here. I belong.. with someone like me. Someone nice who actually has feelings. who tries not to hurt other people. That would be nice. actually once -n- awhile... i wonder if there is a part on the world that is like that. I don't think so, cause the way people treat me. I mean, i don't try to hurt people, but, y'all do. People never understand me. Never have. Never will. So  just run away.